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Monday, February 13, 2012

Valentine's Day Writing Contest Entry

I have entered a Valentine's Day writing contest posted by Susanna Leonard Hill. The guidelines are to post a story or poem of unlikely Valentine's (under 200 words) by 5pm Monday, February 13th. The winner gets either Ann Whitford Paul's fabulous book: How to Write Picture Books: A Hands On Guide from Creation to Publication or a manuscript critique from Sussana herself. I already own Ann's book so I would love to win the critique. At 172 words, here it is:



The Forbidden Love of Glassy and Dropper

I slid up close to her ear and whispered, “Classy, will you be my valentine?”

My heart nearly dried out when she said, “It’s Glassy, not Classy. Geez, you can be such a drip.”

“I thought you loved me,” I sighed.

“I did, I do, but,...hey! Stop pouring yourself all over me!” cried Glassy. “I’m trying to explain why we can never be together and there you go filling my heart.”

Then everything changed. I felt surrounded by her love as she held me close.

“Oh Dropper,” she said. “It is just too dangerous for us to be together. Don’t you see?”

“Glassy, you can be soo transparent,” I cried. “Sometimes you seem soo cool and empty inside. I know we’re meant to be together.” I closed my eyes and kissed her silky smooth surface.

“Dropper, my love. Your kisses are so soft and wet that I feel like we’re floating.”

“Glassy! We are lifting. Hold me! Our time is slipping away.”

GULP GULP GULP

“Dropper!” yelled Glassy just before her heart shattered.

16 comments:

  1. Wow, Alison! Very original and creative take on the unlikely Valentines! I'm amazed with each entry I read at how talented everyone is, and how different all the stories are! Great job!

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  2. Nice entry, Alison. Such creativity in these entries. I am having a blast reading them :-)

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  3. Such fun use of language, and a great story! Very nice!

    Rebecca C

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  4. Cute entry! :) Love the imagery of "filling my heart" and "surrounded by her love." :)

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  5. “I’m trying to explain why we can never be together and there you go filling my heart.”

    Great, great line! Can I steal this someday? LOL

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    1. lol - Thanks. I was planning to write a different story (even doodled a drawing to go with it) but heard Josh Groban's "You Fill Me Up" on the radio late last night and this story popped into my head. : )

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  6. Loved the story Alison and loved the Groban reference in the comment. :)

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  7. Ah, hahahaha! Very clever, Alison. And very funny that it was inspired by that song. I like! :)

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  8. A wonderful take on the theme, Alison!

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  9. Thank you all for the kind comments.

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  10. Alison, I loved your entry. Very clever. I laughed while I read it. Loved the ending. :)

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  11. Very nice Alison! My favorite line was "You can be such a drip"!

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  12. Hi Allison,
    Nice to connect with you!
    This was definitely a cliff-hanger...I guess they made the best of their time together. :)
    This was such a creative take on Unlikely Valentines. Great job!

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  13. Ah the sink-crossed lovers! Excellent entry, full of wit and intrigue.

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